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2/3/2021 12:13:10 PM

Jennifer Cahill
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Perhaps the "We" in a poem about young "America" can thread the plural pronoun
into a universal tapestry:

"We" seek the Sunrise- fiery golden streams, threads of expectancy, not simply of hope. Rarely realized.

Almost always recognized,
for we read, we write; we sing, we praise
the "American Dream". Or God(s).

"We" are the intricacies of Belief.
Of Choice(s). Of a trajectory of fading footprints: "We" take our first steps every "Dawn".

"We" are souls who will vanish unless carved into stone. Or become a portrait on a wall, still viewing the World.

Or our words can be bound-a bandaged sky that allows a Star's light to sift through. And we can see a violet-onyx canvas that beckons

with the glisten ofsterling pinpricks
when the sky is dark. For this part of the tapestry: the color is of a petal dipped

into a Harvest palette, blended into a flower of any pigment ever created by Nature, or by Science; a bloom that will turn to the Sun,

that will fold into itself to rest, every twilight.
A tapestry of effulgence: rainbow
to moonbow; radiation to the splitting

of the photon.
The final seams are tat to drape a veil,
many veils, to keep secret our true

countenance;
to create the facade that bouys
while "we" drift..

towards another Sunset..
rubicund golddust that spatters light;
a shiny yolk that bleeds..a burst clot.

--
Jennifer Cahill

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