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12/7/2011 12:08:41 AM

Posts: 1
This is the first thing I thought this morning...

Slow to rise
Easy to cry
Can anybody help detangle these lies?

My shoulders are hunched
From the weight that I bear
It's so much simpler just not to care

My insides are bleeding
As it eats me like cancer
But even if I'm screaming; God still doesn't answer
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12/21/2011 5:33:46 PM

Allen Nuytens
Posts: 7
Wow, this poem hit me like a brick wall. really powerful and to the point. plus, i feel i can relate ^_^ good work.
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