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8/12/2020 3:00:29 PM
Linda Skinner
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After all these years,
still my mind thinks of you.
The memories of a budding love;
eyes of passion, that sizzling touch.
A yearning in my heart,
the hollow from what could have been.
My dreams are so real,
do you have them too?
The blindfold of your marriage
was all that kept
our love apart!
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9/17/2020 11:19:24 AM
Jack Webster
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Love the metaphor of the blindfold. Hope you will consider expanding it, deepening it, developing it
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9/19/2020 5:51:38 PM
Sally Eslinger
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I agree with Jack Webster. Have to tell you, this funny...my vision not very good, so ” instead of “blindfold” so at the end I wanted to know WHAT it was about them that hurt your relationship? Their disrespect? Their exclusion? Their lies? Well, Blindfold could ask similar questions playing to great poetic detail. Your expression and imagery could elucidate beautifully to what you hoped for, but just what was withheld.
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