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6/8/2020 4:53:48 PM Lycia Harding Posts: 4	If I can't breathe, I cannot speak My brothers, though, repeal the word and though you'd kneel to keep me meek, I gave my life, so they'd be heard I doubt the script you hand me but if I can't breathe, I cannot speak I stand outside the doors you shut and shout until my voice is weak Oppression, though a vile antique, still calls to violence those who know if I can't breathe, I cannot speak, so silence is the status quo My truth is stated by the crowd At rest with protest at it's peak, I'm vindicated thunder loud! "If I can't breathe, I cannot speak"
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6/9/2020 3:14:25 PM Rose Petals Posts: 5	Wow. That is an amazing poem.
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6/20/2020 9:36:02 AM Nick Pierce Posts: 3	The form with it's spacing gives a telegraph message impression. Suggest you experiment with various line groupings to give the piece a palpable pulse.
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