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6/2/2020 10:23:27 PM stranja depoet Posts: 6	I CAN'T BREATHE! "I can't breathe please!!!!" A voice sobs in a mumble, begging in pain for his life. Another black soul smothers, beneath a savage white knee. His rights traded for brutality, his freedom gone with the wind. "Please! Please!" A man whimpers, in a voice that accentuates, a trembling flesh, a failing heart and a spirit drifting from the hands of life. Come one!! , come all!! To the bank of Mississippi. For the river has puked another soul. Come oh!. Gather round Minneapolis, run to the shores of minnesota. For there's yet another willow shrub, dragged six feet-deep beneath the mud. He is black and not of us, He is white, our very own. Bigotry has ruined our hearts. Blocking love's magic, just before it could start. The thread of tolerance, is in continuous wind off the spool of life. Come all, mourn at the pyres and wail at the graves. Rise as one for true justice. Be not divided either by colour or by race. For we might into sight be of different hues, but it's no fallacy we emanate from a common spectrum. -- STRANJA
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6/10/2020 11:54:42 PM Reggae Magnet Posts: 7	Like the poem , well written. It captures the essence of the event with a message intertwined. There is hope in all this if we rise as people and share the love of humanity granting all people their rightful justice.
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6/20/2020 5:14:34 PM stranja depoet Posts: 6	I am very grateful Robert Mayy . Your comment warmed my heart. -- STRANJA
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