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4/12/2020 4:16:22 PM

Moses Sichach
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Psychosis

Psychosis Psychosis
I can see your face in the dark
I can see you no longer love this world
Are you going to take me to a trip
I haven’t yet told her of my love
Will you let me write her a letter
Telling her how she meant the world
Just one last day I will come on the next one

Psychosis Psychosis
This is not at all what we planned
I thought we agreed I live till death do us part
I know I never set the date is it this far
Will I be happy when we walk with the stars
Why did I have to carry this curse
Just one last day I will come on the next one

Psychosis Psychosis
Are you jealous of all this stuff
This connections with spiritus and son
Do I at least get to reap the rewards
Or is the Ogre going to beat me to a pulp
Is death where I can finally find myself
I went there last I was really afraid of the dark
Are the monsters scared of me
Just one last day I will come on the next one

Psychosis Psychosis
I have seen myself in the casket with glass
I have to say my suit was really dapper
I was smiling ?Did I win it was I free at last
Did I fight a good fight Did I save them from the master
Or was my life my life just a blur
Just one last day I will come on the next one

Psychosis Psychosis
I have to ask
Do they have music In the other world
Will I finally learn to dance
Will I dance With my brothers
Who the government shot at work
What about my daughter is she fine
Did she find another dad
Did she know How much I hurt
Just one last day I will come on the next one

Psychosis Psychosis
Is it strange that the tears are a flood
They are people who love me In this world
Will their tears be rain where We are
To mask my face so that my brothers won’t know I am sad
And that I really loved
That I really laughed
And at the end
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I am Just Happy to be here

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