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11/3/2019 11:38:21 PM Michelo Mweetwa Posts: 4	Look into my eyes Look into my eyes See the humanity inside See where beauty resides See them blue, green or brown See them smile or frown Look into my eyes In my eyes the lies can’t hide The tears glitter before they slide My eyes are narrowed to recognize My eyes widen when terrified Look into my eyes Even though I lost my sight My eyes show the imagination in my mind I might be staring into nothingness But my eyes see a million images Look into my eyes See your reflection on the pupil See yourself from my point of view See me blink away your doubts See me beam a gaze of trust Look into my eyes They will shrunken your world view Give you a human mirror image They will beam an immediate truth An intimate feedback about you edited by Michelo on 11/3/2019
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11/27/2019 1:43:44 AM Lizvet Ta Posts: 1	I really like this one. I always like visuals. This would make a good poem for an artist to illustrate, or maybe some digital art could fit it. It also has rhythm. I like the immediacy of it and that it asks the reader to participate. Only the word shrunken here might be better as shrink.
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