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9/15/2019 1:43:14 PM TB Kelley Posts: 1	In the misty morning Sun, awaken now oh sleepy ones. To a day when opportunity knocks. Get up now or be stuck in the flock.The early bird catches the worm, or so that’s what I’ve heard.Through the sunlight and the rain the path you choose wont be the same. Each and every day you trod to find the way to get that job.Eventually you’ll come out on top, in the misty morning sun.
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9/15/2019 3:38:36 PM Jack Webster Posts: 255	In terms of poetry it’s like a lemon flavored candy drop/ throat lozenge, fun, super sweet, designed to get the reader through a brief moment. It stays on the one-dimensional plane of affirmation, rather than diving into the three-dimensional depth of the human experience. Likeable, yet impersonal. It is perfectly what it is intended to be. There is no reason to believe it’ll be poorly received or not communicate the thought that is plainly stated within it. Other than the need for linebreaks there is really no need to edit it further, unless the author was hoping it to be a different kind of poetry.
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9/22/2019 7:40:14 PM Robert Warlov Posts: 9	Learn what cliches are and rid your work of them. What is genius is genuine. Bring your true message to the page and say it the best way. edited by Robert Warlov on 9/22/2019
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10/9/2019 6:24:58 AM Robert Warlov Posts: 9	Nobody critiqued me. are there not 60 gazillion poets here? The only poetry that will survive is that bloodied by stone. Another opportunity to show poetrysoup sucks! edited by Robert Warlov on 10/9/2019
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