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9/5/2019 7:41:44 AM Olufemi Stephen Omolara Posts: 1	When you say you are humble, I look for your greatness. When you say you stoop, I scan your height. When you say you are a giver, I spy your purse. If with no pain you stoop no sacrifice made; and with no lean purse you give No great deed. It takes greatness to be humble as It take height to stoop. In my confusion I see, a poor humble man, or do I say, a humble poor man or Maybe, a humbled poor man.
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9/5/2019 10:58:05 AM Jack Webster Posts: 255	The savage drama of separating sand and sesame seeds. The restrained style is good; the depth of considered thought is good; the clarity is good overall, but gets a little muddled at the end; but, the piece is almost barren of figurative language. The entertainment value of the piece is wanting. Even if you’re just serving meat and potatoes, the meat can be juicy, and the potato can have butter on it. Maybe a dash of salt and pepper?
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