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8/14/2019 1:18:54 PM
Lillian Garza
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A contradiction is the blood in my veins
A contradiction are all of my names
Complicated is my family tree
A contradiction is what defines me
English, French, Italian, Jew
Spanish, Scottish, and Native too
My family has helped this country grow
They fought on both sides of the Alamo
Culture against culture, tribe against tribe
Shards of each one are now living inside
History of many wars lives in my blood
All of them reconciled through the bonds of love
Now a mutt is my official definition
Generations created this contradiction
To divide is the goal of society
Trying to separate what lives inside me
But I am no fool, I know my worth
I am a child of Mother Earth
Division does not exist in her eyes
To her, all are one, Land, Ocean, and Skies
And so, though white, brown, and red are my description
Your separation is the true contradiction
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8/17/2019 1:23:57 AM
Quoth TheRaven
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I like the attention payed to the message over meter of your poem. There is a humbleness that pervades throughout your poem. All in all a worthwhile read for the reader.
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