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6/26/2019 7:56:51 PM

Niyna Desangre
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High Critique: The Coming of Time
~~~from the "Dig My Own Grave Series"~~ ["Dig My Own Grave" is a series of writings in reflection of mental preparation... ~~~Each scoop of dirt rids the mess where I'm to be finally laid to rest~~~]

When my time comes __ I'll be of the ones who'd be ready when their time is done._

I've forgiven myself, my friends, my foes; emptied my soul of all worries and woes._

I no longer seek mountains to climb. I've finally left those wants behind._

I've ceased the endless restlessness. All I want now is eternal bliss._

When I'm taken, if I'm awakened, I pray to be brave and not misbehave._

By screaming and crying; or, of my sins... start denying._

In these latter days of life I'm trying to understand what my dreams are implying._

They show me scenes of past regret__ must be reasons dreams don't forget._

Tis Hidden lessons I'm quite sure to start my inner soul's new core._

About the decisions made in ones life__ try not to whine,complain or gripe._

Make the best of the time at hand; for you will surely revisit them time again._

And When (to you), they have returned. Replace the regret with what you've learned._

If my spirit passes yet my name's unknown, it won't be due to me being alone._

We come in groups and never as one; so a part of The All we each become._

As of now I grow weak and slow; wondering of the days I have left to go._

I hope it won't be for a good long while. So don't read this without a smile._

I'm happy to receive this last chance, to give my life a second glance.

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