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12/31/2018 1:05:24 PM
Kevin Rocheleau Posts: 5
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Most of what I sees a flee From time to time shear poetry Eloquence embrace the very few Linguist challenges the all too Self- therapy to read and create A poets mind at ease or crazed Weather it’s skipping stones of reflection or invigorated enlightenment. The mania of many emotions compel consideration crafting a poets passion laying down life edited by Newman on 12/31/2018
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1/5/2019 11:44:20 AM
D.H. Alderose Posts: 3
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Hi, So I liked the early structure. However, think it could do with maybe proof reading? I was unsure what 'most of what I sees a flee' meant? But loved the line from time to time sheer poetry. I wonder if the line: 'Linguist challenges the all too' should be them all too? The first 4 lines rhymed and the others didn't, some may like this style but personally I don't, either periodic rhyming, consistent, or none at all in my opinion. Overall, very strong start but weaker ending.
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