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12/31/2018 1:05:24 PM

Kevin Rocheleau
Posts: 1
Most of what I sees a flee
From time to time shear poetry
Eloquence embrace the very few
Linguist challenges the all too
Self- therapy to read and create
A poets mind at ease or crazed
Weather it’s skipping stones of reflection
or invigorated enlightenment. The mania
of many emotions compel consideration
crafting a poets passion laying down life
edited by Newman on 12/31/2018
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1/5/2019 11:44:20 AM

D.H. Alderose
Posts: 3
Hi,
So I liked the early structure. However, think it could do with maybe proof reading? I was unsure what 'most of what I sees a flee' meant?
But loved the line from time to time sheer poetry.
I wonder if the line: 'Linguist challenges the all too' should be them all too?
The first 4 lines rhymed and the others didn't, some may like this style but personally I don't, either periodic rhyming, consistent, or none at all in my opinion.
Overall, very strong start but weaker ending.
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