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12/31/2018 10:57:14 AM
Jack Webster
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it's like a seashell. A little beat up, but whole and properly shaped, just enough color to catch the eye, pleasing to pick up, but destined for a jar of shells, none of which are more beautiful than the others.
the meta-view on the poetic process was fun. very playful.
my only suggestion is to work on punctuation, and phrasing.
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1/3/2019 1:58:10 PM
Rene Carter
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I love the poem but the line "instincts spark creativity" doesn't seem to flow for me. Maybe try "instinct sparks creativity"? Really good poem though!
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