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12/22/2018 1:22:36 PM

levi johnson
Posts: 7
Like running naked in the woods
A playground of open thought
A melting pot of reason
Transforming what we’re taught

Travel far beyond the ego
To the dark depths of the id
Caverns of the hidden
Repressions you forbid

Revamp all experiences
With the ink of a pen
Recast your own identity
And triumph over zen

Judgement is suspended
You’re the therapist of the page
Romance to all emotions
Gentle love to burning rage

Your secret life review
Enlightened by willful extremes
To expose hidden desires
Words reshape your dreams

Instincts spark creativity
Your character’s unique response
For inspired ideology
It’s a bard’s renaissance
edited by Levi on 12/22/2018
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12/31/2018 10:57:14 AM

Jack Webster
Posts: 96
it's like a seashell. A little beat up, but whole and properly shaped, just enough color to catch the eye, pleasing to pick up, but destined for a jar of shells, none of which are more beautiful than the others.

the meta-view on the poetic process was fun. very playful.

my only suggestion is to work on punctuation, and phrasing.
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1/3/2019 1:58:10 PM

Rene Carter
Posts: 1
I love the poem but the line "instincts spark creativity" doesn't seem to flow for me. Maybe try "instinct sparks creativity"? Really good poem though!
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