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10/19/2018 6:20:43 AM Wendy Nipas Posts: 38	The test In these days of gender turmoil Gender issues, gender strife It has now become a puzzle How to go about with life What to teach our growing children? Who or what defines their role? When the family is in shambles Undermining every goal It’s confusion upon confusion Rules and morals what are they? What was once highly regarded Is quickly seen as ’in the way’ Change the system, change foundations Make things easy, cut the chains That restrict the craving human Never mind the stains and pains We decide what we’re becoming Can’t you see? And it goes well If you doubt what you are seeing Then don’t ask and we won’t tell The time has come to make things over The more the better, let’s recreate And we will not stop to ponder If this is prompted by self-hate Let us live out every feeling How we think is how we feel And this unrestricted living Really does have strong appeal As the genders keep confusing One another and the rest Whether agreed on or objected This puts all mankind to the test. Wendy Nipas edited by wendyme on 10/19/2018
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12/2/2018 2:53:07 AM Jack Webster Posts: 255	Do you have any favorite confessional poets?
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12/4/2018 10:32:21 AM Wendy Nipas Posts: 38	Hi Jack, To answer your question, uh, confessional poets? I may sound a bit ignorant, but I don't really know any confessional poets. I guess I should? I'm so new at this. Will you recommend some?Why the question if I may ask? And thanks for replying. superlativedeleted wrote: Do you have any favorite confessional poets?
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12/13/2018 1:01:18 PM Charles Henderson Posts: 7	Wendy: Just have to give you an A on this one dear. You kept your pace, form, conviction and content all the way through a long formidable subject. Good write. Charles Henderson edited by Charles on 12/13/2018 -- Chaz
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12/15/2018 7:19:58 PM Wendy Nipas Posts: 38	Thank you Charles, very kind of you. Charles wrote: Wendy: Just have to give you an A on this one dear. You kept your pace, form, conviction and content all the way through a long formidable subject. Good write. Charles Henderson edited by Charles on 12/13/2018
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1/4/2019 12:08:56 PM Luisa Herrmann Posts: 2	This is a very beautiful poem, but it would be perfect if just a little shorter. You have a beautiful message, but it gets a little muddled in all the words. Sometimes, less is more!
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1/8/2019 7:24:34 AM Wendy Nipas Posts: 38	Thank you Luisa. I'll take your words to heart. ThatDramaKid wrote: This is a very beautiful poem, but it would be perfect if just a little shorter. You have a beautiful message, but it gets a little muddled in all the words. Sometimes, less is more! edited by wendyme on 1/8/2019
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