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8/11/2018 1:37:11 PM Deb Depew Posts: 4	Reflection Was it real....was it beautiful Did you think it would be alright? Was it real, was it beautiful.... Or were you just reflecting my light? In a world full of stress and sadness, Where every day is a fight. You were my isle of serenity, I tried with all of my might... To look beyond the exterior, To the soul I saw within... I saw You as my person....My lover, My soul mate, my friend. All the times that you said that you loved me, All the times that it seemed so right.... I sit and I think and I wonder... Were you just reflecting my light? You took my heart and you trashed it, Like it didn’t mean a thing. You took my love like you earned it... You even accepted my ring. The life we were making together Was all that I had to give. The life that you said that you wanted.... The way that you wanted to live. Looking now at the wreckage.... Of what should have been a beautiful life.... I sit and I think and I wonder .... Were you just reflecting my light? I’ve never seen the reflection of what others See in me. I’m my own worst critic... How Can I set myself free? To cut the chains That bind me, to finally gain the sight..... To see the beauty within myself and Learn To love my light. Was it real....was it beautiful Did you think it would be alright? Was it real, was it beautiful.... Or were you just reflecting my light?
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8/20/2018 9:52:32 AM Jesse Rowe Posts: 3	Very beautiful (and sad). Keep on writing and you'll get even better still.
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