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6/13/2018 9:56:19 PM Wesley Brown Posts: 1	Cryptor smashes through the door His pointy fangs eat at the boys soul core Behind him a little boy cries Inside him the little boy dies All thats left in the dark is the green dinosaur Fly away to a far land i want to soar An angels wings fall off and he dies on the floor Inside cryptor the worms eat at the core The green dinosaur seems like so much more The boy gets up and wipes the tears away Cryptor is inside him making him decay Cryptor makes him scream GO AWAY Inside he rots so much he starts to pray Before the boy says amen inside is **** you The boy wants strength but cryptor breaks through All alone the boy is now He fights with cryptor somehow Cryptor is always there a voice in the mind However the boy wants to be kind The green dinosaur glows on the door Broken off its frame long ago Dark with ash as outside it begins to snow The roof is caved in now All his toys lay in the room Inside his little crypt is now a fantasy He looks up at the sky As he walks away he looks at the place to this day Burned and hollow as he once was He cries out from deep inside Then one day cryptor died He tore the poster down Later the house fell down Away he goes with tears Now he looks back at the rubble The boy has become boy He shoots up as he goes along He drinks the bottle and takes the pills Cryptor is the monster inside the social ills Cryptor won it seems The man never left his house and still sees the green dinosaur in his dreams.
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12/2/2018 5:14:22 AM Jack Webster Posts: 255	consider adapting this to the sestina form
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