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3/6/2018 4:08:38 PM Annette Usher Posts: 1	I sit beneath it's massive boughs. The dappled sunlight by my feet. Gentle breezes touch my cheek and scents of summer soft and sweet. Rustling leaf sound fills my head. Communication wild and free. Between us flows a silent love. That old beech tree and me.
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5/2/2018 5:30:12 AM Jack Webster Posts: 255	proofread for complete sentences, proper punctuation. some of your sentence fragments are actually subordinate clauses to the main sentence; just change appropriate periods into commas. the poem itself its wonderful, lovely, and complete. You could elaborate more if you wished, but it is lovely as a drop.
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