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1/3/2018 12:31:42 PM Kelly Dickinson Posts: 3	They say a mothers love is the strongest? They say the bond between mother and daughter can’t be broken? You walked along the street, never looking behind I was 5, but knew, we could not rewind You were gone, leaving me alone What would happen, would you change your mind A letter, a visit, or just phone? No fight for your first born My young heart was left torn You looking forward to your new life My dad alone, without his wife Now a lover to his best friend Was this a bad dream that would soon end? Years passed with little contact I tried to forgive, make an effort But you had two others and I had lost you forever You were my mum, yet still a stranger I now have a son, my pride and joy And our bond will never break, nor be destroyed Cause a mothers love is the strongest, except for a few I guess I was unlucky, but you were too Thirty five years missed, forgotton memories, no regrets I hope he was worth it, cause I have my dad And his love is the best.
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1/3/2018 12:32:58 PM Kelly Dickinson Posts: 3	This was the first "poem" I ever wrote just a few months ago
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1/6/2018 12:51:48 PM Lesa Rodden Posts: 4	What a wonderful poem, I can totally feel your pain here. I can relate also. I love how you put this poemr together. Great job! I am a new poet also. Good luck with your future writing! LESA RODDEN
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1/29/2018 3:41:42 PM Nancy Owens Posts: 1	Kelly, I like the beautiful sentiments expressed in this poem. Any mother would enjoy this poem. I think the poem could be enhanced by applying punctuation and correcting the punctuation in certain stanzas. For instance, the two sentences in the first stanza should end with periods, and not question marks. Other than the punctuation (or the lack thereof ), this poem is a gem. I like it.
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