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11/17/2017 10:53:42 AM Jeff Collins Posts: 5	Hello everyone, As the title says i'm new to poetry. I have no idea on form or anything resembling an understanding of properness, I have just been writing what comes out. So, I welcome your thoughts and insight The Box Herein this box I sit Lamenting,gazing through the slits Beingspass by in shadow form Neveris it not the norm Herein this box I stand Holdingwalls with blood stained hands Willit all come crashing down? Wearingnothing but a frown Herein this box I lay Isit now the end of day? Mytime has come and so will yours Thisheart and soul have finally turned Herein this box I now return Fromwhence I came, to the dirt Nowthis box I pass to you Foryour heart and soul are like mine too
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11/17/2017 11:06:02 AM Jeff Collins Posts: 5	Ok.. for some reason the first two words of every line got added together as one word.. not sure why or how that happened.
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8/14/2018 11:31:46 AM Deb Depew Posts: 4	I really like your poem. My interpretation of the first verse was a baby in a crib, then the bloodstained hands of trying to hold your life together then the final box of a coffin. I’m also new to poetry and have submitted one poem on this forum.
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