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10/18/2017 10:25:42 PM

Ese agbatutu
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Death’s love has eyes

by: Ese

If I were to die I would want to see an angel beforehand.

Death’s love is nothing spectacular

Just someone to hold my hand

An angel of beauty and galore

That all the animals adore

If I were to die I would want to see an angel

Beforehand.

Death’s love is Something spectacular

Just someone to move my hand

An angel of malevolence and galore

That all the rodents hated before

If I were to die, why would I want to see an angel beforehand?

Death’s love is someone to tease me

Someone to love me

Death’s love is all confusing

Close the door.

Slam and shut.

If I were to die, I still would want to see an angel

Beforehand.

Beauty, mutiny

Does not matter

As I sat near the platter

So many choices

So many voices

If I were to die I would want to see an angel

Beforehand

Banning deaths love

Might be the way I can understand

So you can see the eyes of what you have not seen

You never saw it

But you know it's as bright as the light behind my eyes.

As I’m about to die.

Death’s love they call it

Is something that never flies.

It only falls

Up to the sky: logic:
edited by ese on 10/18/2017

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