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9/6/2017 10:31:32 PM

Ashley Carroll
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-this monster-

It bulged out from my chest
it set me off balance
--heavy, I stumbled forward
The clouds above my head suddenly in sharp contrast
analog to HD against the blue sky
my eyes streamed with the sudden brightness
My fingers fumbled across this pulsating monster
throbbing and constricting
--my heart, in my throat
Its hand creeped down to my navel and yanked me from this earth
sending free-falling lurches in my stomach
I let my head fall back from its force
and it held onto me,
wouldn't let me go

-this hope

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