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7/4/2017 8:55:39 AM

Be ok
Posts: 2

Novice Invaders, wrong way on the moor
Moral crusaders tap taps on the door

Glamping, eyes glinting, fast-food and reward
Some unsubtle hinting, a musical chord

Three extra crew, unwanted, unneeded
Time to Renew, all patience exceeded

The mind will return before it is late
No fish port or stern, so pork on the plate

Green bottles of fun, pipes, all we could take
All reasons undone, the biggest mistake

Cubicle open then blanket refusal
Not coping with all the skewed accusal

Engine stalls then roaring, the button broke
Angry exploring, the story evoke

Linguistic gymnastic, verbal disgraced
Crack snapped plastic, speculation embraced

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