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4/18/2011 10:24:25 PM

Hannah Stultz
Posts: 1
Went outside,
Saw his grave.
Started to cry,
I walked away.
Letting the sunlight burn my tears,
I wiped my eyes and turned around.
Felt like dying,
Instead of crying.
I put a red bow,
On his cross.
That I made,
The day of his death.
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4/19/2011 7:19:44 AM

cory long
Posts: 10
this is very good not too much to say about it, has description and rhyme and a beautiful picture you have painted Cory
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5/16/2011 10:47:28 PM

Matt Hunt
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It is good, but I believe more flow is needed towards the end.
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