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6/4/2017 10:50:07 PM

Jennifer Cope
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Still I try to awaken

From this nightmare

I know I must go on

But the pain is never-ending

Like a fire

A simple spark at first

Then it grows with intensity

Until your world

Is engulfed in flames

A part of you is going

And never more can be replaced

You seek comfort

Yet none is to be found

You are running down

A lonesome dark hallway

Where no end can be found

Yet, you run

Never missing a step

Nor slowing

You feel your eyes start to burn

Yet no tears will fall

For they have dried

Like a lake in a dessert

In the heat of summer

Now your mind is racing

Like a fan spiraling out of control

Nothing can be changed

History is written

Just one more minute you seek

Oh, how you wish

You could turn back time

Just simply to say goodbye

If only you could

Hear her voice once more

However, you can not

If only she could

Tell you everything would be ok

Like she did when you were a child

However, she can not

If only you could

See her grin with that stupid smirk

One more time

However, you can not

If only you could

Cry on her shoulder

Feeling her comforting embrace

However, you can not

If only you could

Say you’re sorry

But you had to stand your ground

However, you can not

If only you could

Have erased her pain

However, you could not

If only she could

Have turned that life away

However, she could not

If only she had

Stopped that night

However, she did not

If only you had

Said “I love you” that last time

However, you did not

If only she were

Still here

However, she is not

If only you could

Awaken from this nightmare

That is now became your life

However, you will not

*written on 7/23/09 a month after my sister died.

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