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5/29/2017 5:59:47 PM

Ryan DeCicco
Posts: 2

Basically basic, muddled with mud.
Clearly clarity, for this old dud.

Definitively defined, nude and lewd.
Energetically energized, often seen rude.

Frantically frowning, obscene and mean.
Greatly gratifying, seeking a place to lean.

Helping hostility, dive and strive.
Inside idea, staring at a hive.

Justify justice, bide and hide.
Killing kindness, no ears to confide.

Liberally loose, trade and fade.
Musical mask, what is made.

Notably nubile, fated and hated.
Overly obscene, utterly inebriated.

Puny Patriotic, hopeless and faithless.
Quiet quake, cringing at the tactless.

Remedial remedy, smile and trial.
Stunning stealth, casting out the vile.

Truthful tenacity, bug and chug.
Universally united, reach out and hug.

Vilify victims, tilled and filled.
Wiley warming, you must be thrilled.

Xenophobic xylocarp, fast and mast.
Youthful yearning, subjugated at last.

Zealous Zen, mend and lend.
Always alone, live to not offend.

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