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5/10/2017 11:24:48 AM Oliver Mckeithan Posts: 5	I would appreciate any and all critiques to improve my poetry writing. NOBEL PRIZE WINNER? Nasal, sand paper gritty voice. Why did he win the literature Nobel? “The answer my friend” may be “blowin’ in the wind.” What were the Swedes thinking when they voted, what were they on?. Probably sat around saying “everybody must get stoned.” Some probably opposed the vote How could it be unanimous? The yeas said “don’t stand in the doorway, don’t block up the hall.” The chair tried to contact this great man of counterculture poetry. No response. The notice on his website taken down. Surly, snarling, reclusive. His thought might have been “Go away from my window…… I’m not the one you need.” Will he come to Stockholm? Will he stay hidden? Perhaps we should ask Quinn the mighty Eskimo. Normal 0 false false false EN-US X-NONE X-NONE /* Style Definitions */ table.MsoNormalTable {mso-style-name:"Table Normal"; mso-tstyle-rowband-size:0; mso-tstyle-colband-size:0; mso-style-noshow:yes; mso-style-priority:99; mso-style-parent:""; mso-padding-alt:0in 5.4pt 0in 5.4pt; mso-para-margin-top:0in; mso-para-margin-right:0in; mso-para-margin-bottom:10.0pt; mso-para-margin-left:0in; line-height:115%; mso-pagination:widow-orphan; font-size:11.0pt; font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif; mso-ascii-font-family:Calibri; mso-ascii-theme-font:minor-latin; mso-hansi-font-family:Calibri; mso-hansi-theme-font:minor-latin; mso-bidi-font-family:"Times New Roman"; mso-bidi-theme-font:minor-bidi;}
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5/10/2017 11:47:24 AM Elle Meadow Posts: 15	hmm may I suggest that a diatribe does not a good poem make?
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5/14/2017 1:16:44 PM Oliver Mckeithan Posts: 5	This poem is not a diatribe. I grew with Dylan in the 60's and 70's and I am happy he won a Nobel Prize for literature. This was meant as tongue in cheek and using some lines from his songs. You may not care for it which is ok but it was my attempt at some humor.
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5/15/2017 12:33:35 AM Elle Meadow Posts: 15	it genuinely does not read as humourous. The tone is, not exactly angry, but dismissive, putting down. And most certainly reads like a moan - NOBEL PRIZE WINNER? Nasal, sand paper gritty voice. - this is a put down Why did he win the literature Nobel? “The answer my friend” may be “blowin’ in the wind.” i.e. you have no idea why he won What were the Swedes thinking - again dismissive, no respect for their choice when they voted, what were they on? - had to have been 'on' something to make the choice they did Probably sat around saying “everybody must get stoned.” only people high on something would do this Some probably opposed the vote How could it be unanimous? such a poor choice some MUST have disagreed The yeas said “don’t stand in the doorway, don’t block up the hall.” so they were coerced into agreeing The chair tried to contact this great man of counterculture sounds sarcastic poetry. No response. The notice on his website taken down. he blew them off Surly, snarling, reclusive. he is not a nice person His thought might have been “Go away from my window…… I’m not the one you need.” he rejected them proving they were wrong Will he come to Stockholm? Will he stay hidden? Perhaps we should ask Quinn the mighty Eskimo. sarcastic tone again - who knows if he will go accept his award and basically we don't care if he does. So you might want to reconsider the tone in which this is written, because any humour in it is being lost.
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5/15/2017 5:16:10 AM Oliver Mckeithan Posts: 5	You are entitled to your opinion. It would be a dull world if every poem ever written was liked and/or understood by every body. I have read this poem in two writing groups and presented it as one of my assignments in the Gotham on-line poetry writing classes and it was generally well received for what is was-humor. There were some who did not like it and others who suggested changes which I made because those changes did sound better. Obviously you know very little about Dylan's background.
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5/17/2017 12:03:52 PM Elle Meadow Posts: 15	And here we go again. IF you do NOT want critique, can't accept critique and think the poem is wonderful the way it is then DO NOT POST IT FOR CRITIQUE
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