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4/5/2011 10:13:19 AM
Ashley Blodgett Posts: 5
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Smiles- On the surface shine so bright, But rotting within.
The dentist comes and saves The smile, but leaves a fallacy Within.
Fake- Putty packed in to fill the hole, normal now. Yet never feeling the same.
The tongue slides over The stranger. Not accepting- Yet rejection is no option.
Stuck with the fake Injection, fake happiness, Fake smiles.
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4/5/2011 10:33:25 AM
Ashley Blodgett Posts: 5
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I would really like some comments on this poem... more at ashthepoet.blogspot.com
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