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4/5/2011 10:13:19 AM
Ashley Blodgett
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Smiles-
On the surface shine so bright,
But rotting within.
The dentist comes and saves
The smile, but leaves a fallacy
Within.
Fake-
Putty packed in to fill the hole, normal now.
Yet never feeling the same.
The tongue slides over
The stranger. Not accepting-
Yet rejection is no option.
Stuck with the fake
Injection, fake happiness,
Fake smiles.
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4/5/2011 10:33:25 AM
Ashley Blodgett
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I would really like some comments on this poem... more at ashthepoet.blogspot.com
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