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3/16/2017 11:09:37 PM Spiros Zafiris Posts: 3	O chair upon which I rest you'll outlast me the seconds grimly laugh, stand-up-comic-like ~ ..2017..©2017 Spiros Zafiris Note: in another workshop it was suggested I make it: O chair upon which I rest you'll outlast me— the seconds grimly laugh like a stand-up comic ~ ..2017..©2017 Spiros Zafiris Note: dear reader, do you prefer tanka a) or b) or,perhaps, you have other suggestions.. _____________________________
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3/17/2017 4:13:15 AM Shubham Kamble Posts: 4	B
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3/18/2017 10:36:43 PM Spiros Zafiris Posts: 3	..thanks, Shubham.. .>sp _____________________
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3/24/2017 7:35:22 AM Doug Vinson Posts: 102	Agreed - I like B better.
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3/25/2017 6:19:45 AM Spiros Zafiris Posts: 3	..thanks, Doug.. .>sp ___________________ edited by Spiros Zafiris on 3/25/2017
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