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3/14/2017 11:30:55 PM
Doug Vinson
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Hi Brenda. Powerful stuff. I think you need to work on spelling and punctuation. Looks like you're using "except" in place of "accept," and "wherein" has no hyphen, "regard" not "reguard." The sentence "I want to experience the kids I don't know,or who've they've become" - I think it would sound better as "I want to experience the kids I don't know, and who they've become."
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