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3/31/2011 5:47:27 AM Ezeji Emmanuel Posts: 2	Normal 0 HEROESTears dropping like water In confussion the mind After the heroes of our generation Then feathers would flutter in the wind The angels and the moon past Glide above the mountain Where are thou generation heroes Clothes hang in the dust Worms of the earth eaten Not seen, but there it was When will thou return Building the bridge to the edge of the town Learning the young from you Waiting are we for you
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4/1/2011 6:30:24 AM Manouchka doreus Posts: 23	you might want to edit this poem... i like the theme but your delivery is a bit weak. using words like thou and phrases like waiting are we requires for you to either transform the entire poem into the shakespearean era or put them together in a way that make them seem as though they belong.
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4/2/2011 6:05:00 AM RAQUEL p Posts: 12	I am not sure if the old English is working in your favor, I like the theme though. And I understand the message. Good luck
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