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11/2/2016 9:05:42 PM XM LEE Posts: 1	I have mybrothers hurting me I have mysisters hurting me I have mylove hurting me I have mydream hurting me I have myheart far away calling on me I havethe pain deep inside destroying me I have mywords explaining me I have mytears washing me I havelover far away singing for me I havethe crying in the lonely walk of me Ihave the ancient unsatisfactory annoyed me Ihave the wondering wolf in the wild me I haveshaken hands with every sunset of me I havethe kindest words when you say love me I havethe greatest secret hidden in the deep lake of me Iam burning and freezing atmaximum temperature of me I havethe tornado tearing pieces of me I amgoing to explore to the endless of me
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6/20/2020 6:43:58 AM Nick Pierce Posts: 3	SAILMAY wrote: I have my brothers hurting me I have my sisters hurting me I have my love hurting me I have my dream hurting me I have myheart far away calling on me I havethe pain deep inside destroying me I have my words explaining me I have my tears washing me I havelover far away singing for me I havethe crying in the lonely walk of me Ihave the ancient unsatisfactory annoyed me Ihave the wondering wolf in the wild me I haveshaken hands with every sunset of me I havethe kindest words when you say love me I havethe greatest secret hidden in the deep lake of me Iam burning and freezing atmaximum temperature of me I havethe tornado tearing pieces of me I amgoing to explore to the endless of me
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6/20/2020 6:46:03 AM Nick Pierce Posts: 3	I put in some of the spaces needed. Do you see them? If so then please do the rest and we can have a further look at the piece. edited by Nick Pierce on 6/20/2020 Now I see the post was done in 2016. Hmm. edited by Nick Pierce on 6/20/2020 edited by Nick Pierce on 6/20/2020
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1/8/2022 2:06:43 PM Tom Hanks Posts: 14	First, it's better to develop idea behind the poem and then to write it, this will save your time at writing poems.
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4/6/2024 2:36:23 PM Michelle Smith Posts: 12	Just put a space between words... other than that, I wouldn't change anything, because this is you expressing how you feel. Let it out, let it go, let God heal your heart, He loves you so much, you are a child of the Heavenly Father... this weekend is the Feast of Mercy! Open your hands, close your eyes and see His Heart full of Mercy, sending out the rays of grace, like a sunbeam and moonbeam of healing comfort... knowing He is there for you. Also, Mother Mary, through her hands, sending the light of His love, if you feel it is easier to be close to a mother. edited by Michelle.Allison.S on 4/6/2024
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