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3/25/2011 3:28:43 AM
Lucas Williams
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Insidious pharaohs reigning death abound the kingdom, a sinister smile resonates
of bloodlust. Commanding voraciously the tyrants consume human life, an endless
cycle of severed souls. Utopian preaching of a destined era stagnates over this
desolate desert. Blood Rivers converge with the Nile, an inceptual validity embraced
in flesh. Severed limbs suspended from within the leviathan necropolis exude blood;
such is the decor of the pharaoh.
lucas williams
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3/25/2011 7:32:55 AM
Aron Jacob
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"Inceptual"...what a curious word...did you borrow that from Heidegger's philosophy of "inceptual thinking" or from the recent film "Inception?" I can't say I'm sure what an "inceptual validity" is, but your description of the pathological tyranny of a pharaoh is very powerful.
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