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5/6/2010 11:43:56 AM
Robb A. Kopp Posts: 12
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Fenced off with a comb New age sand crab’s beachfront home Cup of styrofoam
A Haiku By Robb A. Kopp All Rights Reserved © MMX edited by masterartisan on 5/6/2010 edited by masterartisan on 5/10/2010
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5/7/2010 10:03:06 AM
Corinne Curcio Posts: 3
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Made me smile. I like the rhymes, the humor. Really nothing to nitpick here.
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5/9/2010 11:03:14 PM
Charles Henderson Posts: 7
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The middle line is short one syllable. Count should be 7. Also Haiku is NOT supposed to rhyme. I understand some of the new age writers are not paying attention to syllable count as once were but I have not read anything about moving toward rhyme. lol Charles
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5/10/2010 8:14:59 AM
Robb A. Kopp Posts: 12
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Charles wrote:
The middle line is short one syllable. Count should be 7. Also Haiku is NOT supposed to rhyme. I understand some of the new age writers are not paying attention to syllable count as once were but I have not read anything about moving toward rhyme. lol Charles
Thanks....Something looked wrong However Haikus are evolving as are the languages that write it. edited by masterartisan on 5/10/2010 edited by masterartisan on 5/10/2010
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