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Forum Home » Be Gentle » It affects everyone

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3/18/2011 7:03:44 AM

Manouchka doreus
Posts: 23
A beautiful cause destroys everything.
Forget.
growth.
hate.
innocence, just known, lost.
more,
new
ostracised.
people, quarantined, rejected severely.
torn
unimportant
vacant
with xenophobic zealotry.
edited by mrzcheekerz on 3/21/2011
edited by mrzcheekerz on 3/21/2011
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3/21/2011 12:16:27 PM

Aron Jacob
Posts: 12
Just a few spelling errors you might want to correct:
beautiful
ostracized (unless you intended the British "ised")
zealocy (not a word...zeal, zealousness, zealotry are possible alternatives)
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