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3/18/2011 7:03:44 AM
Manouchka doreus Posts: 23
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A beautiful cause destroys everything. Forget. growth. hate. innocence, just known, lost. more, new ostracised. people, quarantined, rejected severely. torn unimportant vacant with xenophobic zealotry. edited by mrzcheekerz on 3/21/2011 edited by mrzcheekerz on 3/21/2011
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3/21/2011 12:16:27 PM
Aron Jacob Posts: 12
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Just a few spelling errors you might want to correct: beautiful ostracized (unless you intended the British "ised") zealocy (not a word...zeal, zealousness, zealotry are possible alternatives)
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