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6/25/2016 10:04:42 PM
Tina Lineham
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Hi there,
I'm always very open to receiving helpful feedback in any form to try and improve. Any feedback would be much appreciated. I've copied one of my poems bellow that I would like to improve.
The world is a filter for the finest
Naturally divided,
Refined in detail,
To strike revenge,
To falter is to fail
Now the frail remains of our undoing are cremated
In his image
The universe implodes
Only the finest will be saved,
The rich and the richer
Those who spill blood,
Not their own,
Those who reap what the poor have sown
The faces behind the Nations finest
Haunt the dead and dying.
Please feel free to read and critique my other poems posted on my page.
Regards,
Tina
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6/26/2016 4:42:02 PM
Graphite Drug
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Not sure what it is you're trying to do or say. Something spiritual and sympathetic to victims of. . . ? Maybe you should write about what you're trying to say or discuss it more with somebody. Maybe this is just free-form expression?
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