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3/5/2011 2:07:57 PM
Jennifer Cahill
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Note the sighing of day's retreat
Color the grey blackness of night
Drunken thievery my feat
Of gleaming lights, beckoning frights
To begin to stir in this sea
Of a waning tumultuous falling
Baptized with his promise to me
Survival his only calling
No white bursting of the stars
In this sea of a fading fading grasp
No redeeming god, no ark
Messed up with each other perhaps
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Jennifer Cahill
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