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3/27/2016 10:50:13 PM Jolene Cheyney Posts: 66	This is for a contest on another site, so please, no comments that may be considered to give an unfair advantage. Just a simple "Looks good" or "Keep trying" would be appreciated. Please forgive, its a work in progress. A chain reaction, I once saw love to be But I have to admit, once you commit, It's really so much more. Where love abounds. . . Understanding, compassion, trust abide. Love is the safety net . as we go out into the world each day. dancing along the high-wire. Where love abounds, joy commences. When joy lives everywhere. . . Optimism, hope, belief reside Joy is a walk along the beach Salt air awakens the spirit After joy comes to you, take a swim That she may bid peace to enter When peace can be heard. . . Calm, serenity, tranquility inspire Peace is the song we sing with vibrato Can we make it a duet? Let it ring out, sing out Soon peace brings long-suffering (But I should say, might be the other way) Long-suffering, can anything smell as sweet. . . Strength, bravery, fearlessness required To give or volunteer when it requires courage Or helping another even if it may put self in danger It is the smell of valor Long-suffering does also entice kindness to join the cast Kindness is the star of the show. . . Pardon, forgiveness, sensitivity glow The light kindness shines dispels all fright It covers great distances and swims many miles to Deliver nets full of the sweetest dreams Kindness and goodness work together to mend broken seams The heart full of goodness I see is not bare. . . (Please share, I seem to be deficient, bad case of no-good-itis.) Virtue, morality, righteousness prevail [Treat faith, mildness, self-control in the same manner] Where love abounds. . . Understanding, compassion, trust abide. Love is the safety net. . . Love's cycle is infinite. If we reach a perceived ending We can simply begin again edited by Jmc86850 on 3/27/2016 edited by Jmc86850 on 3/27/2016
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