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3/22/2016 7:06:50 AM

Rose Yohn
Posts: 11

I've fallen from grace

Crashed through the sky

Landing crumpled where I lie

My sins are what sent me tumbling

Weighting down my soul.

Wings ripped out

Im bleeding from the scars they left behind.

I've been cast out forever

My golden halo no longer shines

My sins forever haunt me

Lies, darkness, and empty eyes.

My fall from grace has left me hallow

Wishing for the girl who used to fly

Before the lies

Before the wrong paths my feet followed

My mortal sins confine me

Tormenting me in the form of

Darkness and daemons which attack me from all sides

As they invade my mind.

If not for being branded on my soul

I'd just wash them all away

Hoped to turn the water black

Cleansing the shadows to light again

Ill live amongst the sinners now

Forced to fight and try to survive everyday

It's my eternal punishment.

Forced to wonder with those like me

Other who have fallen because of their dark and secret sins

Aging till we die.

Maybe then I'll be forgiven

For the sins written in my soul.

Maybe then in deaths dark embrace ill be able to fly again .

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