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3/10/2016 10:03:00 AM

David Adeyemo
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Alone I walked on alittered part
A companion I seekon my journey
Saluting me was aweird man afar
Sitting inside anabandoned caravan
Looking tattered ina torn sleeveless
Haaa! Haaa! Haaa! Hislaughter continues…
He was eating froma barbaric piece of cake
Hey brother!Whispered the lunatic
At this pointrestless became my mind
And then I ran intoa mud shelter to hide
A deep breath ofrelief I took and sat
Resting my back onthe primitive cracked wall
Only to hear astrange voice echoing again
Just like the soundof many water dropping
I stood up butbehold my legs are heavy
At this time I wasweak and weary
I couldn’t help butto give up
For the evil lurkedin the darkness
But when I was aboutto scream!
Mama woke me upfrom sleep
For I have beendreaming a dream

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