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9/22/2015 1:14:38 PM James Johnston Posts: 5	Off to my corner, In the depths of a world that moves to fast, I stand here alone from time to time, Thinking about all the memories from a time long gone, All i want right in front me So close but still out of my reach, Everyday i"m fading,Fading further from where i want to be, Choices made that drive the nails in deep, Lock in my own personnel coffin with no escape, I hear it over and over again, thought after thought swimming through me, Once so strong but now I'm worn,worn so thin, Will i ever stand on my on again edited by Jjohnston92A on 9/22/2015
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9/22/2015 1:15:40 PM James Johnston Posts: 5	In truth i don't expect a great review i did this one pretty quickly and i am definitely rusty personally i feel i lack good transition from line to line
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