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8/27/2015 11:09:10 AM
Shaan Babu Posts: 6
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Hello,
I'm new to this forum. I'm posting one of my poem for your feedback and comments. I would welcome all the feedback I can get to improve my writing skills. In this poem, each couplet is an individual couplet and they are not connected to each other. I would really appreciate any and all the comments I can get. thanks ......................
I endured burning all life but did not give light: If this is life then I didn’t live.
What a cruelty, they talk against me; Those whom I have never spoken a word.
Whatever I felt like,I had written with sincerity; These are my prayers not Poetry.
It is just that I’ve had bad luck and then; Even my candle/lamp refused to lit.
The world seems to tremble with fear from my army; But I have never competed with you.
The reason I’ve become so lonely;
I have became friends with everyone, no enmity with anyone
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