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1/9/2015 10:29:32 AM richard poor Posts: 5	tin man the brutal echoes resound within of being the way i am not softly, but as a din of all that i cannot understand, i have rusted and stayed without thought of movement how from the path i have strayed so far from any soothant, for when i was made my maker forgot a part that where love cannot fade so i search for my heart........ Read more at: /poem/tin_man_629726
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1/15/2015 4:26:55 PM Graphite Drug Posts: 81	Some interesting prose. The shift from third person to first in the beginning line is clumsy. Maybe there's more to the line that was cut off. It is reminiscent of a song by the band America called Tin Man, a great song, check it out.
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