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10/4/2014 7:27:59 PM paul martin Posts: 12	wishing tuesday morning away I wish those early morning birds Would quit their fascist songs Have they got nothing better to do Than wake me from my slumber So I can follow the spider on the cobweb ceiling Wondering when he gonna attack I wish the shower wasn't so hot I wish the soap wasn't so slippy I wish the cereals weren't so sugary I wish the car wasn't so filthy I wish I was anywhere else but here I wish the radio played decent songs I wish my poems flowed like golden ink That drip upon the eloquence of the finest silk I wish I could stop smoking Everyone else seem to manage it I wish my words were mighty spears That would crack the heads of stagnant brains I wish this coffee didn't taste like **** I wish I had the balls to rob a bank I wish that truck would bloody move Too slow would never make it out alive I wish them lights would turn green I wish the phone would stop ringing I wish I had the skills to leave this all behind I wish I got a letter saying "love your stuff ,here's ten grand write us a book" Ah but it's all wishing; wishing Tuesday morning away.
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12/6/2014 1:53:54 PM Cole Pew Posts: 3	Good **** man! -- C. Pew
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12/9/2014 6:15:09 PM paul martin Posts: 12	thanks for the feeback glad that you enjoyed it
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