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12/29/2010 2:59:25 AM

Eiken Laan
Posts: 10
Afterthe thaw
birds swim the sky
wings outstretched, exuberant
warmed by a light drizzle
falling on pear soaked fields
they drink in a saturated land

Gliding from Cedar to Spruce
great canopies of army green,
the gulls alight from a satin sky
to branches covered in lichen
where pistachio ivy clings

Sweeping over a shrouded sea
liquorice birds blot the view
A silver birch extends
it’s arching limbs
as blackbirds gather
on a melting morning
edited by Eiken on 12/29/2010
edited by Eiken on 12/29/2010
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