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9/18/2010 1:02:42 AM Raquel Rezendes Posts: 4	As soft and gentle as the Eagle flies, it spreads its wing's through the spacious skies. In it's round about ways it circles the trees, with a gentle touch of a soft cool breese. Beneathe it's wings, the wind has caught, and lifts him up but not alot, for it's up to him to find it's place, or forever the sky is all but space... I have the permission of posting this poem on PS. This poem was sent to me originally from Todd Gilmore of Bunnell Florida edited by saphire on 9/18/2010 -- ~Saphire~
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11/8/2010 8:32:03 PM Jancarl Campi Posts: 9	This is a beautiful poem. I love to see an eagle in flight. Your words paint a beautiful picture. Be aware when you write that spelling errors can ruin a poem. IT's means it is and its shows possession. in line two it should be "In its round about ways... In line 4 should be Beneath its wings.... and not it's place buts its place. Th epoem is good, the errors stand out.
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12/20/2010 6:22:40 PM Raquel Rezendes Posts: 4	Thank you for the gentle critic, I will fix it immediately. -- ~Saphire~
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