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1/9/2014 12:01:55 PM Luann Pfost Posts: 15	thanks i did a major rewrite including a name change to twilight circus. still not happy but its better
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5/2/2014 9:18:01 AM Lily Twinkle Posts: 1	A delightful poem about the circus... if I may politely intrude here.... I'd start with a Calliope. Hearing the sound of Calliope, I ran to catch a seat upon the sand, As the night sky devours the setting sun, chirpy crickets and brassy cicadas.. .. kick off tonight's performance ------------------- What do you think?
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5/19/2014 12:13:15 AM Luann Pfost Posts: 15	i like the idea of a cricket Calliope will have to think how to change that first verse again thanks
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