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9/20/2013 7:09:50 AM

Gabe Shelly
Posts: 95
I once saw a green snake
Its innards were splayed-out as the sun did it bake--

But its eyes I remember most--

This was not "zero to the bone" nor "into that goodnight"

Something different this was--

And so I write this because

The fire was gone still the light flickered dim

It was soon to come...soon friend--

A passive acceptance of 'What Was and What Will Be',

The eyes said it all--

So Sorry Charlie...The End

The End 9/12/'13
edited by Gabe on 9/20/2013
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