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6/2/2013 3:49:52 AM

Lynn Dolly
Posts: 133

Everyone on earth has purpose
When that monkey doesn't perform
Life becomes a wild circus

You wake up to an alarm clock
Give up your dreams
Must not have felt important
Backfires with a ass kick in high swing

Laziness isn't a disease,
It's a choice
Everyday you deny change,
You're ignoring an angels' voice

The earth wont spin a solution on your lap
Open your senses and live the minutes
Wake up your spirit from it's boring nap

Better yet,
Do it for your offspring
Be an example
The out of reach idea needs to be wiped cleaned

Don't be afraid of rejection
The more you share,
The more you'll provoke attention
It's proud and awakening

It's standing in front of people and making them dance
Singing in front of a crowd entertaining
Never thought you'd have the chance
But you took one and it feels good
Keep doing it because it's happiness, make it last!

Nothing in this world is more importantthan making people smile
If there's something you can do to bring that on
Make tons of it and bring me a sample
Share it and share it again, then share it more
It's more contagious and your worrieswashed to shore
Seeing happiness is a moment everyone adores!
edited by svlynn18 on 6/2/2013

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