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6/1/2013 12:07:29 PM Gabe Shelly Posts: 95	Everywhere I go It is sure to follow-- Up and down and all around. It does me no good to stay away In the end it will only me betray
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6/1/2013 6:08:45 PM Reason A. Poteet Posts: 9	In the interest of form which matters little to some. I would remove "me" from both lines 4 and 5. That would provide the continuity of increasing each line by one syllable, a technique often used in poetry. A good rhyme scheme for five lines. Re your theme this is good philosophy stated here, one should face stigma eye to eye and figure out why. I'd give this 8/10. edited by Reason A. Poteet on 6/1/2013
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